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Delix Club: Chapter 1 "The Magical Sign of Delix"

Since the Winx defeated the dark energy for good, everybody were just fine, but suddenly 2 Witches at Cloud Tower summon a Fairy that was defeated because she wants to get all the magic on the hole Universe; so when the Fairy called Darkia re-born, she transformed the 2 witches into shadows and now she wants all the magic for her.
So now the Winx can't  Defeat Darkia because of her Powers; so when they are defeated by Darkia, a group of young fairies go to Earth to earn a new power called Lynix, and for this they must need help of some other fairies but at least I know that my fairies will defeat the evil Darkia.

Griselda - Mistress Faragonda, something is happening outside Alfea
Faragonda - Well, Prepare all the fairies and let's go there!
Griselda - OK Mistress, LET'S GO FAIRIES

(Outside Alfea)

Winx - Magic Winx Sirenix! (Transitions)

Darkia - Ohh look at those fairies there!, they think they can beat me! The MOST POWERFUL FAIRY EVER!

Bloom - Well I know we can defeat you, let's go Winx
Stella - I think you need some Sunshine! (Attacking a shadow Witch)
Musa - The music power will defeat you (Attacking Darkia)

(Darkia Attacks)

Tecna - Tecno-screen!

Darkia- Shadow Witches come to join me! Dark Shadows, come to defeat the good energy! Shadow Convergence!

Winx - AHH is too strong! NO!....

Everybody at Alfea was scary! THE WINX WERE DEFEATED!  

Darkia - Well I think you had enough this time, let's go shadows!
(Darkia Disappeared)

Faragonda - Winx Are you OK? WINX? WINX!

(The Next Day)

Faragonda - Yesterday the Winx were defeated by this horrible creature, but now we must defeat Darkia to restore the peace on the Universe...
Student 1 - but how?
Student 2 - Yeah what can we do?
Faragonda - We must search for a new Power to defeat Darkia but the Winx are hurt so...

Altair - We can go!
Aude - Yeah We want to defeat that Fairy!
Faragonda - Is just to dangerous for students fairies, tomorrow I will call to a friend to restore the Company of Light.
Fabia - but we are ready! We have everything to defeat her!
Faragonda - I have took my decision!

(At night)

Claudine - I want to defeat that Monster
Aria - but what can we do?, Mistress Faragonda told us...
Aude - It doesn't matter we must earn a new Power to defeat her
Altair - And I know what kind of power!
Perla - REALLY? which is?
Altair - is an ancient power from Earth, my home planet, but To earn it we must take a travel to the past.
Perla - No way!
Aude - So, we must go?
Fabia - Yeah, but how can we go back to the past?
Claudine - Gladys!
Aria - Gladys?
Claudine - Yeah, Gladys is a fairy of time, maybe she can helps us
Altair - well let's go Delix!

(Koc Knoc)

Gladys - Hi Girls, What can I do?
Fabia - can you help us?
Gladys - yeah what can I do?
Aude - Well can you travel to the past?
Gladys - Yeah!
Altair - well so come with us!

(On Earth)

Altair - We must go to an Island near a River, there we must go back in time
Gladys - Ok, but once We travel I must go!, I can't stay here, sorry.
Aude - Well, at least me can go back, then we must find a way to come back!

Gladys - take my hand, and now HERE WE GO...

PREVIEW of the Next Chapter:
The Delix go back in time to find Merlin so when they are about to find him, a Horrible thing happen, a dark spell on Aria's Necklace, so can they broke the spell and find Merlin?
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:iconmlpeglover:
awsome do you do all this
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DragonShinyFlame Oct 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
yes
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KillerGirlFuria Oct 20, 2013  Student Digital Artist
All right, I'll just be honest. You may hate, you may argue. I'ts my opinion, my critique.

That's how you're wroting a dialogues is a worst type of mistake ever. Dialogues can NOT be wroten like that, never. There's nothing about places, emotions and look either. Just nothing. Empty dialogues. Where the heck are descriptions I ask?  Something like "(On Earth)" gives us nothing. It's like the script of a play, not a story. Nope, I'm not buying it.

Thank you, have a nice day.
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DragonShinyFlame Oct 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
well it is the first "Story" so the new season it will be a "formal book" 
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KillerGirlFuria Oct 23, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I don't understand what you mean. I'm speaking here about writing style, not which book or story is it.  Just my opinion as a writer and a critic.
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DragonShinyFlame Oct 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
well I don't know anything about you and your writings so I can't debate with you.
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KillerGirlFuria Oct 25, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I'm writing a story in english now, so when I'll finish I may link it for you, if you want.
Also, if you want informations about me: I'm fifteen-year-old girl from Poland.
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DragonShinyFlame Oct 25, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I say that you can't criticize right now because you don't have experience... 
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KillerGirlFuria Oct 25, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I DO have experience, and that one of little things that I know. I've just finished prologue of my story, here: killergirlfuria.deviantart.com…
Read, and after you do so - judge. My English sucks, I know.
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